Hi Kaylee! First off I would like to say that I enjoyed your take on The Song of Ch’un-Hyang. I liked how you were exploring the unknown authors intention of his/her tale via extracting intentional heroism depicted in the tale. Some things I notices were that you started every paragraph with almost the same phrasing of "One other way...". I would recommend maybe differentiating the vocabulary of the introductory sentences. I also wondered while I was reading your thoughts, if the author chose such extreme reactions against Ch’un-Hyang by the Governor to further indicate the bravery of the hero and the cruelty of the ruling class. Was the author showing an issue of class treatments or were they indicating a lack and strength in the moralities of society? Over all I liked the clearness of your project and the section where you say " Because he does not want her for love but because of her beauty, the readers can see that the governor views Hyang as more of an object. " I thought that was very insightful.
Hey Kaylee, I like the project so far. You did a good job on on stating exactly what you wanted to touch on in the story, "The Song of Ch'un-Hyang". It was also interesting to see what your thoughts on the story were and how you think the author was using the other character's to their opinion on Chun-Hyang showing how she is stubborn and faithful.I can agree with that and it' basically the same i got from it after reading the story the first time. In all you did a really good job in laying out your project. It was very easy to follow along. I also want to add that you used good quotes to back up your arguement. I myself don't see anything drastic that needs to be fixed maybe just change some of the ways you begin a paragraph like the comment above mine suggests but other than that I don't see any problems with your project. Overall you did a great job covering the story keep up the good work.
Hey Kaylee I enjoyed that you pretty much laid out the main point that you were going to talk about in each of the paragraphs because it got me ready for what the topic you are about discuss and what I was about to be thinking about. I think you had a great contextual evidence and you did a great job incorporating the literature and quotes from it into your project that made it flow very well together. I also understood it fairly easily since I did my project on the same story and made the same kind of arguments. I also like how you formatted your project it made it easy to read and follow. Your project also answers your main question pretty good I think. I could not really find anything wrong or you needed to fix. Overall, you did an excellent job on the first project! I enjoyed reading it.
Hey Kaylee I enjoyed that you pretty much laid out the main point that you were going to talk about in each of the paragraphs because it got me ready for what the topic you are about discuss and what I was about to be thinking about. I think you had a great contextual evidence and you did a great job incorporating the literature and quotes from it into your project that made it flow very well together. I also understood it fairly easily since I did my project on the same story and made the same kind of arguments. I also like how you formatted your project it made it easy to read and follow. Your project also answers your main question pretty good I think. I could not really find anything wrong or you needed to fix. Overall, you did an excellent job on the first project! I enjoyed reading it.
Hi Kaylee, I enjoyed reading what you had to say about The Song of Ch’un-Hyang. I really liked how you kept tying each paragraph back to your original thesis and made the connections between what you were saying and what you were arguing clear. I think you managed to incorporate a lot of great information and quotes from the story into your project. You had an interesting project topic and you managed to discuss and explain your thoughts on the topic you chose well. One thing that I think would help make your argument read more clearly overall would be to consider a different organization of the points you make. For example, the second paragraph in your project feels like it would read better as an introduction because it doesn’t connect back to your claim about the author’s attitude towards Ch’un-Hyang. Other than that and minor instances of awkward wording, really nice work on your project! I think you made a good argument and managed to back up your argument well with quotes from the story.
Hi Kaylee!
ReplyDeleteFirst off I would like to say that I enjoyed your take on The Song of Ch’un-Hyang. I liked how you were exploring the unknown authors intention of his/her tale via extracting intentional heroism depicted in the tale. Some things I notices were that you started every paragraph with almost the same phrasing of "One other way...". I would recommend maybe differentiating the vocabulary of the introductory sentences.
I also wondered while I was reading your thoughts, if the author chose such extreme reactions against Ch’un-Hyang by the Governor to
further indicate the bravery of the hero and the cruelty of the ruling class. Was the author showing an issue of class treatments or were they indicating a lack and strength in the moralities of society?
Over all I liked the clearness of your project and the section where you say " Because he does not want her for love but because of her beauty, the readers can see that the governor views Hyang as more of an object. " I thought that was very insightful.
Hey Kaylee, I like the project so far. You did a good job on on stating exactly what you wanted to touch on in the story, "The Song of Ch'un-Hyang". It was also interesting to see what your thoughts on the story were and how you think the author was using the other character's to their opinion on Chun-Hyang showing how she is stubborn and faithful.I can agree with that and it' basically the same i got from it after reading the story the first time. In all you did a really good job in laying out your project. It was very easy to follow along. I also want to add that you used good quotes to back up your arguement. I myself don't see anything drastic that needs to be fixed maybe just change some of the ways you begin a paragraph like the comment above mine suggests but other than that I don't see any problems with your project. Overall you did a great job covering the story keep up the good work.
ReplyDeleteHey Kaylee
ReplyDeleteI enjoyed that you pretty much laid out the main point that you were going to talk about in each of the paragraphs because it got me ready for what the topic you are about discuss and what I was about to be thinking about. I think you had a great contextual evidence and you did a great job incorporating the literature and quotes from it into your project that made it flow very well together. I also understood it fairly easily since I did my project on the same story and made the same kind of arguments. I also like how you formatted your project it made it easy to read and follow. Your project also answers your main question pretty good I think. I could not really find anything wrong or you needed to fix. Overall, you did an excellent job on the first project! I enjoyed reading it.
Hey Kaylee
ReplyDeleteI enjoyed that you pretty much laid out the main point that you were going to talk about in each of the paragraphs because it got me ready for what the topic you are about discuss and what I was about to be thinking about. I think you had a great contextual evidence and you did a great job incorporating the literature and quotes from it into your project that made it flow very well together. I also understood it fairly easily since I did my project on the same story and made the same kind of arguments. I also like how you formatted your project it made it easy to read and follow. Your project also answers your main question pretty good I think. I could not really find anything wrong or you needed to fix. Overall, you did an excellent job on the first project! I enjoyed reading it.
Hi Kaylee,
ReplyDeleteI enjoyed reading what you had to say about The Song of Ch’un-Hyang. I really liked how you kept tying each paragraph back to your original thesis and made the connections between what you were saying and what you were arguing clear. I think you managed to incorporate a lot of great information and quotes from the story into your project. You had an interesting project topic and you managed to discuss and explain your thoughts on the topic you chose well. One thing that I think would help make your argument read more clearly overall would be to consider a different organization of the points you make. For example, the second paragraph in your project feels like it would read better as an introduction because it doesn’t connect back to your claim about the author’s attitude towards Ch’un-Hyang. Other than that and minor instances of awkward wording, really nice work on your project! I think you made a good argument and managed to back up your argument well with quotes from the story.